Hey,do you want to play netball, I said sure.
We played for one hour,the girl’s name was abby.
I said to Abby pass me the ball so she passed it to me,AAAAAAA it hurt,Abby said but i didn’t mean to hit it that hard.
We put a band-aid on it, i forgot to eat my pizza ,it taste YUMMY
My leg is not hurting,so I went for a walk. I can hear the bird sing.
I went back home and took a nap. I was so tired of netball.
‘’OH NO my leg hurt’’
Hi Annabella, I really enjoyed your story! The plot built up nicely and the ending was definitely unexpected. This almost reminds me of the time I hurt my leg going swimming (since I am a swimmer)
One thing I would recommend you do next time is maybe capitalize characters’ names because the first time you mentioned “Abby” you spelled it “abby” other than that your piece was really enjoyable!
Happy writing!
~Aubrey from St. Charles Illinois