100WC – Week#3 – Hannah

Sitting alone up in a tree looking at the cars driving by one by one. Suddenly a car slowed down by a group of girls who looked like they were having fun. I just thought it was someone they knew who was in the car. One of the taller girls started nodding but they never should have said yes, the driver hopped out of the car it turns out it was a man. One of the short girls who looked young started screaming with fear. The man grabbed the young girl now all of them started screaming with terror And that’s why you don’t trust strangers.

2 thoughts on “100WC – Week#3 – Hannah”

  1. Hi Hannah,
    Well done on your story this week. I like how you used the prompt. You’ve done a great job.
    Your story has an important message too.
    Keep up the great writing.
    Ms Brennock
    Team 100 w/c
    Dublin, Ireland

  2. Wow… your story got very intense pretty fast, but it was a nice plot twist turning what seemed like a very pleasant story into something scary. The only bit I would consider reworking is the part where “suddenly a car slowed down” as suddenly is a very fast description for something that happened slowly… I found that part of your difficult to imagine. My favourite bit was how you combined the stillness of sitting in a tree with the motion of everything else in the story… it was a very clever juxtaposition… which is just a very long word for saying putting things side by side to compare their differences.

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