100WC – Week#2 – Jaxon

Just a Normal Day.

It was just a normal day for me. I was biking home from school and then a car randomly appeared in front of me. Its presence startled me so much that I turned and crashed right into a hay bale.

All of my fruit fell out of my bag: the newsletters, the lucky bookclub, the notices I was supposed to give to my mum and dad. Everything flew out of my bag and now I was stuck headfirst in a hay bale. When i got home i had a shower and went to bed. “Good Night”…

One thought on “100WC – Week#2 – Jaxon”

  1. Congratulations on your response to this week’s challenge Jason. I enjoyed reading your text. Your word choices, like ‘randomly’ and ‘presence’, added a depth to your writing. I liked the way you listed the contents of your bag to give us an insight without a direct description of you and your life. Stopping with ….’now I was stuck in a hay bale’ would have ended your text strongly. (Adding information about what you did when you got home, without telling us how you got out of the hay bale, and how you got home , seems redundant.) I hope I get a chance to read more of your writing.

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