100WC – Week #7 – Bailee

Have you ever seen a scooter dance. I have.

December 24 2011. That was the most magical day ever. My scooter danced, the concrete turned red, and the grass was as fluffy as a bunny.

Are bunnies fluffy? I am gonna say they are.

Why is this day the most magical day ever I hear you wonder?

Well I have wondered for years and after LOTS of research I have come to the conclusion that… (drumroll please) Oh wait I forgot oh yeah I am still working on it. But don’t worry I will figure it out (hopefully).

See you next time.

2 thoughts on “100WC – Week #7 – Bailee”

  1. So your story was really good and how did the scooter dance and how did the concrete turn red? Oh and how fluffy was the grass?

  2. Kia ora Bailee.
    Oh boy, that was a very frustrating read! I thought you were going to tell us something spectacular, but no, you held back and kept us in suspense. I like the way that you have used brackets as a tool in your writing, and ellipsis.
    These are ways to make your writing more interesting for your audience, but ultimately, the most important tools are the words that you use, so choose carefully, take your time and make sure that in the end, your piece is the very best that it can possibly be.
    Ms M #100WC

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