100WC – Week #4 – Ruby

“ Why do we have to do a stupid walk? ” I complained. I wish we didn’t have to do this. This couldn’t get any worse. I hate walks.

“ Dad? ”

“ Yes. ” Our leader replied.

“ When can we rest? ” I yelled.

“ Once we get to the river. ” He said.

I leapt for joy. There was a river! I could finally have water to drink. I was so thirsty I could  drink the whole river.  

“ We’re here! ” Dad boomed. 

I couldn’t believe my eyes. There were some weird creatures. In seconds the river had disappeared. I have never seen the river bed so dry…

5 thoughts on “100WC – Week #4 – Ruby”

  1. Hi Ruby

    I really liked your story.
    I thought it was funny when your character jumped with happiness when your character saw the river

    Daniel
    Ms brennock’s 6th class

  2. Hello Ruby! It was very clever how you introduced the idea of the river. It was great how you showed the sudden excitement of the narrator when he heard about the river. It was in stark contrast to the beginning of the story and showed how dry the river was. Well done,

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