100WC – Week #35 – Tania

“Hahaha!!!”
Splat!
Squish!
Crack!
“ Hahaha!!!.’’
“ What are you guys doing now? ’’ yelled Brendan.
’’were not guys we’re girls’’ yelled Isla and me.
“C’mon girls, time to go now”shouted Mum. We jumped in the car with Bob, our dog,
“ Wow, hey look, we’ve run out of milk, let’s go to the supermarket, where is the supermarket?
I don’t know but Bob can lead the way. ”
“Give him the milk bottle, ok Wow now, Which way to the shops?’ it panted soon we were at the supermarket.
“Good job Bob, can you get the milk?
“ Ok got it, let’s go home.”

2 thoughts on “100WC – Week #35 – Tania”

  1. Kia ora Tania.
    I really like the way that you have used dialogue through your story, although you do have to be careful that your readers will be clear about who is speaking to whom. You certainly have a very clever dog there!
    Keep practising your writing.
    Ms M #100WC

  2. Hello Tania,
    I really liked how you had put ´were not guys were girls´´
    It gave a lot of funniness to it.
    Try to add some punctuation words and keep up the good writing

    Keep Practicing
    -Amber

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