As I sneak outta the house I hear a loud creek behind me,
I turn around with a soft gasp, only to see my cat scatter across the room with a blue jay in its mouth, I carry on sneaking out the window and trip on some lights……….*WAMP*
“Owww,” I gasp.
I garb a light post, my fingerless gloves touch the freezing cold ice, I get up with snow on my fleece. What the? I hear a scream come down the alleyway.
I crept down the stairs and looked to my left and saw the unthinkable my cat Laylay.
Trinity,
You have me on the edge of my seat creeping along the alleyway along with the narrator. Your word choices like sneak, gasp and unthinkable have set a scene of worry and concern. I do like you line that clearly describes your fingerless gloves touching the ice. Well done.
Keep writing.
Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA