100WC – Week #33 – Janelle

One day I was with my friends.  We saw a big statue near the ocean.  My friend Kyna said “it looks like a unicorn horn but a creepy one”.  Then I said “ no it looks more like a spike”.  My other friends said that there was a legend about it.  My friend Tania said “ the legend was about a girl  that wanted to be a unicorn and turned into ONE”.  I said “no the real legend was about a spike remember”.  The spike has been here forever.  We wanted to swim but I saw the spike turn around a lot.

One thought on “100WC – Week #33 – Janelle”

  1. Greetings from Australia Janelle. Congratulations on your response to this week’s challenge. Telling your story through a conversation between friends is an interesting author’s device. I note the care you have taken to use speech marks. Remember to put a comma after the word ‘said’. When you have told your readers you are with friends, it is not necessary to write ‘My friend Tania – your reader’s will assume that the person speaking is your friend. I was left wondering what made the spike turn, and who else noticed it turning. I enjoyed reading your writing. 🙏😊

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