“The heat was unbearable,so unbearable” was that good I said to the director
“Yep that was fine Mia” the director said “ next line chop chop “he told me
Why is it so… then suddenly the ground start to shake
“Earthquake “ I yelled.
I went to slide under a desk but my foot got stuck on a rope. The building was about to split in half right under me could this be the end. The building spilt. I screamed, “Ahhhhhhh HELP me!!!!!” the rope starts to split . It broke under me I fell on a mattress
“Cut” the director yelled.
Hi! Amelia, i really enjoyed your story i really enjoyed the part when she was in the earthquake part
Amelia,
I was getting worried about the narrator. I thought it was going to end as a ‘dream sequence’. Then, you surprised me with the revelation that it was a scene from a play or a movie. Clever.
Keep writing.
Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA