I woke up in the morning feeling pumped as ever before.
I got dressed in such a rush for my friend’s birthday party.
If I am late , she will scream her head off.
Skipping out the door, something caught my eye.
There was like a curvy triangle thing with a handle lying on our driveway.
Hurry up, we’re gonna be late!
I jumped into the car.
Ten minutes later…
I was on a rock climbing wall, that’s right.
While,I was half way up, I realized there was a handle missing off the wall. I wondered where it could’ve been?
hi jade! i enjoyed reading your piece!
one thing i loved was your details, it helped me visualize the scene!
you made me think of the time i went to a rock wall birthday party!
something i would recommend was to make sure not to start ALL your sentences with, “I,” if you used more transitions it would make your story better! there was something i had a question about, the picture was an old fashion iron, but you didn’t really let me visualize that it was that and instead it made me think of a door handle, but overall good job!
happy writing! -gabi in illinois