100WC – Week #28 – Lucas

One day I was walking to Starbucks for one cake pop, one coffee, one s’mores frappuccino but when I was going to pay for the Starbucks the building shook and thenI ran away with the starbucks  but then the police came and it was a police chase. Then I just went to a volcano and I just put the cake pop  stick in the volcano. 

But the policeman just got up the volcano so just went down but the  policeman slid down because  shorts and a short t-shirt so I got in my car and went.

One thought on “100WC – Week #28 – Lucas”

  1. Hi Lucas! This is Lucas from Illinois (HA! We have the same name!) I enjoyed reading your piece! One thing I liked about it was that you had Starbucks as your topic! Funny! I liked how you incorporated the popularity of cake pops into your piece. Actually, I also love cake pops from Starbucks! One question I have is what was it like “sliding down the volcano?” (yes I know this is probably fictional) but maybe next time, incorporate feelings while this event is happening. One thing I would suggest is using punctuation such as commas, periods, exclamation marks, and question marks. Overall, I enjoyed your piece!

    Happy writing,
    Lucas, Illinois, USA

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