100WC – Week #28 – Dash

At school me and Brae were on the field playing soccer and the bell rang. So we went to class and did our 100 word challenge, then two girls got us in trouble. Typing away they started talking again and also saying dumb words in their chairs. BANG BANG the building shook and then I said, “what the heck is going on,”.

Brooke hit me on the head with a pencil. I told on Brooke, then Brae and I went to the green room. Bang bang bang the building shook then. Based on a true story by the way bye.

2 thoughts on “100WC – Week #28 – Dash”

  1. Hi Dash, I enjoyed reading your piece. One thing I liked was how this was based on a true story. It made me wonder what actually happened. Actually, I think I could piece it together. One thing I would recommend in the future is not ending your stories with “bye”. In general, this was a good story.
    Jack, IL, USA

  2. Greetings from Australia Dash. Congratulations on your response to this week’s challenge. It was an interesting strategy to make your text a personal recount. Remember it is ‘Brae and I’. I personally don’t like it when stories end with ‘bye’ or ‘the end’. When you stop writing, your readers know it is the end.😊🌻

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