100WC – Week #2 – Jack P

I was happily on my playstation then Mum said “Get off you have got your chores.  Washing to be folded, floors to be mopped and rooms to be tidied. I heard her “grumpy” voice and I quickly went to my room. It looked like a pig sty.  I finished it, picking up the miniscule bits of  white paper under my bed.  My next job was mopping.  I filled the bucket with water and floor cleaner. It smelt like pine trees.  I began to mop. The floor felt  sticky. When done I marked my chores on the calendar with a tick. 

2 thoughts on “100WC – Week #2 – Jack P”

  1. Congratulations on your response to this week’s challenge Jack. It is not easy to create a coherent text using random words. I think lots of readers will make a connection to your text. As a mother, I did! You used the senses to help your reader visualise your text – hearing the grumpy voice, seeing the minuscule bits of paper, smelling the pine scent of the floor cleaner. The use of a simile says so much in a few words. It’s a good author’s device to use. I can see the effort you put into using sentences of different lengths. Your text was well crafted.🙏😊

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