Rolling into the castle i felt the white wind blowing against my back the Leaves Crackling beneath my feet
I was in danger.
The guards were chasing me, i ran as fast as i could and ducked between a couple of buildings.
My Crafty self kicked in i started thinking.
I finally came up with a solution i would bait the guards into thinking i was trying to escape the castle then i would duck into the palace and disguise myself as one of them.
A simple but hard plan, I ran out and Started phase one…
I love the way you have set your story out, Jaxon. It makes it very easy to read and to follow. I particularly like the short sentence ‘I was in danger’. I also like the way you talk about ducking between a couple of buildings. The way you share what you are thinking about and planning with your reader is very effective too.
Hi,
I really like your story and your use of adjectives
See you soon,
Ben