100WC – Special Prompt #2 – Amber

“That was so PHENOMENAL” Said Jackie.

“Alright alright” said mum. We can go on again but you have to be very careful the rides here are very hazardous.

“Ok” said Jackie 

They leaped onto the ride again but when they were at the top something happened…

The ride had stopped and all the lights had shut down and to make the scene any worse it had been night 10Pm at night with no lights. 

“MUM!’ Shouted Jackie

“It’s alright we just need to stay calm!”

Suddenly the light turned back on instantly but then they flickered, on and off and…                  

One thought on “100WC – Special Prompt #2 – Amber”

  1. Hi Amber,
    Wow, what an eventful story. I hope your characters were okay in the end!

    This was a piece that was creative, unexpected, and attention-grabbing. You did well to build suspense, such as through your use of ellipsis. In addition, you made good use of dialogue that contributed towards the overall smooth flow of the narrative.

    Well done and keep up the good work,
    Anna (Team 100WC, Edinburgh)

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